The door is Open......Come In!?

Well friends..... my fiance is out of the country(he does a job abroad and has recently got it).there's a
'kinda engagement' over here....and the worst part of the story is he'snt coming! I've written a poem4him...just tell me if i shud send him and is it a nice1?here it goes...

"Im waiting and I'll be waiting....
for you to return im waiting!
No matter how long you take....
but let not my poor heart break!
For that is our life's beautiful day....
and i cant think of your absence in anyway!
For few moments keep the world aside....
and come, stand by my side!
Im Waiting and I'll be waiting!"

Im even waiting4 your replies friends.....thank u!

if thats how you feel then those are the best words to choose....its good to me! it would me feel good for the record :)

OMG THATS SO SWEET

sounds a bit clingy

Very immature sounding to me. Maybe 1/10. Keep trying.

If he's your fiance, that is sweet !

I think it's very good
great job :)

Here's a few suggestions: Don't use helping verbs! They water down your poetry-Instead of" I'm waiting", you can say "I wait"..Also, see if you can think of words that soud like how you're feeling. For example, "euphony" sounds happy while "cacophony" sounds hard and rough...Find words that mean and sound like how you feel...