I am ten years old and i wrote and book and am entering it in a conest can you please spell and grammar check it
The year is 2050 and the future has come cloning, teleportation, time travel has now been widely available for the public. Cars that fly like birds upon the sky,A woman has given birth to her son. Eight years later he son while walking to school was ran over by a car. They had a funeral for the son and her husband missed work on the day their was a massacre on his husband job. She goes back in time and doesn鈥檛 allow her son to go to school that day and he still lives but she forgets about the massacre at her husband job and a day later he is killed. She must find a way to save her husband and her beloved son so things can go back to normal.
Asia : It hurts its hurts
Doctor : Just keep pushing
Bryant : Keep pushing and in a few more minutes our son will be born
Asia : I am
Doctor : you can stop now here is your child
(The Baby Burps on Asia HERE IS MY STORY I NEED YOU TO EDIT http://docs.google.com/Doc?id=dfjvcbzg_8...
FOR SOME STRANG REASON I COPIED AND PASTE IT TO MY QUESTION BUT IT DIDNT DO THE FULL THING I DONT KNOW WHY you need to print this out, double spaced, and take it to an English teacher. do not depend on the people here because they make typographical errors, as well as grammar and punctuation errors, when they are doing long manuscripts.
you have done a very good job for a fourth grader.
get some help from an English teacher or the library lady Your computer will spell check it for you. Even if you have copied and pasted it. Simply make another copy of the whole manuscript (save on desktop) then run it thorugh your spell check. That SUCKED. Sorry, but that was probably the worst thing I have ever read. just to let u know
there is spell check
and u have punctuation problems idk about the spelling but i must say...u are very smart i would never think of words like that lol That鈥檚 so cute
The year is 2050 and the future has come cloning, teleportation, time travel has now been widely available for the public. Cars that fly like birds upon the sky. A woman has given birth to her son. Eight years later while walking to school he was run over by a car. They had a funeral for the son. Her husband missed work, and later wound out that there was a massacre where he worked. She goes back in time and doesn鈥檛 allow her son to go to school that day and he still lives but, she forgets about the massacre at her husband鈥檚 job. A day later he was killed. She must find a way to save her husband and her beloved son so things can go back to normal.
Asia: It hurts its hurts
Doctor: Just keep pushing
Bryant: Keep pushing and in a few more minutes our son will be born
Asia: I am
Doctor: you can stop now here is your child
(The Baby Burps on Asia)
Bryant : Ha Ha
(Asia gives a mean look to Bryant and he begins to stop)
Eight years and 60 days later
Allen: Mom can I get teleported to school today
Asia: Boy that鈥檚 why these kids so fat now trynna get teleported to school don鈥檛 you know back in my day 鈥?
Allen: Fine mom I will walk
Asia: go on out of that door before you get late.
(Allen walks to school and a hovering car crashes upon him and he dies)
(Two men teleports to Asia house to tell her of her son's death)
Asia : Men, don鈥檛 you be sneakin up in my house all unannounced if I ain't know no better I would have popped one in ya eye .
Investigator March: We Are Very Sorry to tell you that your son has died.
Asia: Say what, what you talking bout
Investigator March: Your son Allen unfortunately was killed by a hover car
Asia: Boy don鈥檛 be playin no games with me
Investigator March: I apologize but your son has passed away
Asia: Who was driving the hover car that crashed my son?
Investigator Jason: A man named Charles Edwards
Investigator March: The FBI team has offered to pay for the funeral and burial spot
Investigator Jason: We must go back to our headquarters now
(They teleport away from her house)
(Bryant comes home from work)
Bryant: Hey Sweetie
Bryant: Honey, where are you?
(Bryant hears crying so he walk into the room Asia is in)
Bryant: What鈥檚 wrong honey?
Asia: The world. Our son was hit by a hover car and its all my fault. I should have let him teleport to school
Bryant: Our son is dead
Asia: What did I just say? He wouldn鈥檛 have been dead if I only teleported him to school
Bryant: You didn鈥檛 know how things where going to turn out honey.
Asia: His funeral is tomorrow
Bryant: I will say that I鈥檓 ill and call off work
Asia: Okay
Bryant: I need some rest
Asia: I do too
(The next day)
Asia: Wake up Bryant, we must get to the funeral early to help with the planning
(The Phone rings)
Bryant: Ill get it
Bryant: Carter Residents how may I help you
Henry: I鈥檓 Glad I called off work to go to your son鈥檚 funeral! Did you here about what happened at work?
Bryant: No, what happened?
Henry: You know our co-worker, Matthew Robs
Bryant: Yeah, what about him
Henry: He killed everyone at work
Bryant: Why?
Henry: He was angry at something
Bryant: Look I got to get dressed for the funeral
Henry: I will be at the funeral too
Bryant: Bye
Henry: Peace
(Bryant gets dressed and calls Asia so they can teleport to the funeral together)
Asia: I鈥檓 not going
Bryant: What you talking about?
Asia: I鈥檓 not going to the funeral, it will just make me sadder
Bryant: I would love to comfort you but I need to hurry up and go to the funeral
Asia: Go then
(Bryant Teleports)
( Asia Puts on all black, grabs a gun and goes to the Time Machine station)
Asia: I need to travel back to yesterday
Agent Mark: That would cost twenty million dollars
Asia: I don鈥檛 have twenty million dollars
Agent Mark: Then you can鈥檛 time travel
Asia: Oh, I will time travel!
Agent Mark: Please exit the premises
(Asia Locks all the doors and holds her gun up)
Asia: Everyone Get Down!
(Agent Mark tries to destroy the locks with solar power)
Asia: Their Solar Proof now get down
(Agent Mark Calls in the FBI)
FBI: We will teleport armed agents immediately
Agent Mark: okay
(The Armed Agents arrive)
Armed Agent: Asia, we will place you in Void until you die if you do not drop your weapons
(Asia goes in the time machine quickly and selects the time she wants to go back she then arrives) Allen: Mom can I get teleported to school today?
Asia: Sure Sweetie
Allen: It cost 30 cents
Asia: Boy I aint got no 30 cents
thats all i felt like doing | 